clara/twelve fic: but we’re so happy [rewrites pt 1/2]

twelveclara:

hey everyone – the rewrites of but we’re so happy are up and completed! not too much has changed in part one, but a lot of details have been added/altered that are important for later! part 2 is radically different with an added 12k words, so i’ll appreciate any/all feedback! thank you!! 

part one: “I knew them both,” Jack says quietly. “I watched them fall in love. I watched them change.” Their knees touch, and her hand is on his thigh, and he’s smiling at her like she’s the sole reason he’s alive; Rory pictures the sun and the earth, orbiting. [from the outside looking in. the song repeats, I miss you, I miss you, I miss you, haunting him. so, maybe he’ll never know. 10k words]

part two: 

Nobody has ever kissed her like this in her entire life; she swears she’s spent years building up to this, decades, millenniums. Somewhere, a star is dying and a galaxy is being born and her head is a black hole; in every other dimension a version of her stops and takes in a breath, missing something. She says hotly, “If we’re already going to hell, you might as well just fuck me tonight.” [she’s the devil herself and he never stood a chance. 27k words. mature.]